Some constructive crits please

[RodFlanders]

This is some 3d stuff I've been working on... I'm looking for opinions, good or bad or both. Be honest, tell me what you dont like.

Some things to take note of: The red line going down the front of the robot is unintentional and will be removed. Also, the materials on the mount are taken from the robot just to give me an idea of how to map the materials... so theyre going to be replaced with new materials.

Also, for the eye sockets and mouths of both the robot and mount, they will get a lighting effect, kinda like flashlights in a way... also I've been flirting with the idea of using flames instead of lights.

http://i14.photobucket.com/albums/a316/RodFlanders11/ostrich5.jpg

[D8alus]

The robot looks cool..the mount, notsomuch.

[RodFlanders]

The robot looks cool..the mount, notsomuch.

Yeha I hear that, the mount took like an hour or two compared to a couple nights for the robot. I think when I properly texture the mount it'll look better, and I think I'll put some more detail into the neck and body of it.

Thanks!

[Oreet]

First Impression:

I don't like the leather saddle on the robot mount. it should have some sort of metallic "saddle" type thing built onto the robot mount, instead of it just being a saddle placed on it's back.

[D8alus]

also the red stripe actually works on the robot...I'd leave it.

[Oreet]

also the red stripe actually works on the robot...I'd leave it.

i agree with d8. i like the red stripe... (hooray beer???)


also, the grass looks too much like hair/fur. it's way too thin and whispy.



i like the little blue utility box on the ground too.

[Tanizaki]

Is this the new Alliance race?

[RodFlanders]

Thanks thanks thanks!

First Impression:

I don't like the leather saddle on the robot mount. it should have some sort of metallic "saddle" type thing built onto the robot mount, instead of it just being a saddle placed on it's back.

Yeah on the one hand it doenst make sense, but on the other hand, it's my best texture work to date. I'll put a close up pic at the bottom of this post so you can see the bump map details... I agree 100% leather has no place, but I'm going with it cause I'm impressed with it. Also, the final scene will have things like that wood box you liked, plus stoned (with textures from my stonehenge trip!), a church in the background, etc... so leather will make a lil more sense even though I'm pretty sure a metal robot on a metal mount wouldnt want a leather saddle lol.

also the red stripe actually works on the robot...I'd leave it.

Interesante!

i agree with d8. i like the red stripe... (hooray beer???)


also, the grass looks too much like hair/fur. it's way too thin and whispy.



i like the little blue utility box on the ground too.

Okay maybe I'll leave that stripe in... good looking out guys. Yeah the grass was made with a hair/fur plugin, good eye man. I'll have to fine tune that.

Is this the new Alliance race?

Naa, the the "mount" is pretty much a shitty version of the Mechanostrider wouldnt you say?

Here's a closeup of that leather texture and bump map...
http://i14.photobucket.com/albums/a316/RodFlanders11/ostrich3.jpg

[Oreet]

Structurally, those are very tiny feet on that mount to be holding up such a large robot, plus the robot's rider.

might want to give it a wider/longer footprint.

[mrlaze]

I agree wtih everyone.

[RodFlanders]

Structurally, those are very tiny feet on that mount to be holding up such a large robot, plus the robot's rider.

might want to give it a wider/longer footprint.

Yes! The problem I was running into was that if his feet are bigget they'll intersect. I need to work on that, which basically means I need to change where the legs start from so when they get to the feet theyre not so close together.

Good catch, a few other people mentioned that as well. This is the feedback I need :thumbsup:

[Oreet]

Yes! The problem I was running into was that if his feet are bigget they'll intersect. I need to work on that, which basically means I need to change where the legs start from so when they get to the feet theyre not so close together.

Good catch, a few other people mentioned that as well. This is the feedback I need :thumbsup:

instead of making the feet wider, and causing them to run into each other, make them longer in the front and back, more similar to human feet, or even bird feet.

[350Chevy@BS]

Robots ftw!!!!1111!!ONE!!!111!!!11!!!!ELEVEN!!!EXCLAMATIO N!!!
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[Oreet]

or even bird feet.

because the mount is obviously inspired from an Ostrich, so I'd look at Ostrich feet, and make a robotized version of them.

[burnout_goddess]

It looks like a robot chocobo to me, mayhaps bird like feet would be better suited with the space constraints?

Just add one 'talon' in the rear and two up front per foot.

[Oreet]

It looks like a robot chocobo to me, mayhaps bird like feet would be better suited with the space constraints?

Just add one 'talon' in the rear and two up front per foot.

and if these are to be some sort of war-mongering robots, make the talons have sharp claws, os that even if they aren't actually useful in combat, it would still look intimidating.

[RodFlanders]

Yeah the first idea was to give it ostrich feet, I actually have 10-20 pics from google. The thing is, the robot is made op of basic shapes, so to keep with that continunity, I am leaving the ostrich basic as well.

But yeah I can get away with stretching the feet like you guys said. I <3 you guys :)

[The Hair]

http://www.froody.net/gat/sstrich.jpg

Fixed!

[Oreet]

:eek:

that rocks.

[starscream]

wtf :lol:

[RodFlanders]

wtf :lol:

Thats your new wallpaper and you know it!

[350Chevy@BS]

Gayest thread ever...
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[Oreet]

Gayest thread ever...
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Compared to most AMB threads... this is about the Straightest thing to ever come outta here.

[RodFlanders]

Gayest thread ever...
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3d animation is gay?

[starscream]

cars are gay

[Oreet]

cars are gay

... says the guy who designs cars all day at work.

[starscream]

... says the guy who designs cars all day at work.

:shifty:

[Oreet]

:shifty:

http://www.the-elite.net/pwnion/gay.jpg

[mrlaze]

we need some :goatse: up in here.

[Luaren]

...or not

[mrlaze]

...or not

I was going for the more gay theme.

[Fluke_Starbucker]

Very nice. I like the "vacuum" cleaner look to the mount. Not too keen on the saddle or the "hair".
The robot needs bigger eyes I think. I like the stripe you said is unintentional.

[mrlaze]

http://img137.imageshack.us/img137/8577/gaysharkdance2vo.gif

[Oreet]

...or not

just be glad he posted that instead of tubgirl.

[Luaren]

just be glad he posted that instead of tubgirl.
I'm very thankful for that.

[mrlaze]

we have tub gurl too :tubgirl:

Oreet wont make a lemon party one though :emo:

[Qwomosexual]

It looks great, except for the mount's legs.

You should give it monster truck wheels.

[Shpadoinkleboy]

http://www.froody.net/gat/sstrich.jpg

Fixed!

:fag:

[Chook]

Where are the friggin' guns? Robots without guns are like Max w/o Power (or a job), SS w/o RITE, me w/o poop, Brandy w/o multicock attention whoreness, burnout w/o tires, MrLaze w/o Mr, Gary w/o radio, Tani w/o Tani Jr, Oona w/o polls, 01337 w/o 1337|\|355, The Hair w/o hair, and so on and so forth.

so give dem bots some guns, yo! kapow! kapow! zhing! zhing! pew pew pew! wrnkwrnkwrankwrank! It's the American way!

:BAM: :end: :usa2: :usa!:

For reference, I consulted notable historical documents such as the Terminator Trilogy, Transformers (the original series), every STNG episode involving the Borg, the cheezy van Damme movie where he's a robot but it sucked so bad I can't remember the name - or maybe he wasn't a robot and he was just protecting one...okay, strike that because if he was protecting one she was a lame robot and that's why the movie was lame. Yeah, AI doesn't count either, because there are no robots with guns in that one so it was 3 hours of a whining robot.

/critique

[RodFlanders]

Where are the friggin' guns? Robots without guns are like Max w/o Power (or a job), SS w/o RITE, me w/o poop, Brandy w/o multicock attention whoreness, burnout w/o tires, MrLaze w/o Mr, Gary w/o radio, Tani w/o Tani Jr, Oona w/o polls, 01337 w/o 1337|\|355, The Hair w/o hair, and so on and so forth.

so give dem bots some guns, yo! kapow! kapow! zhing! zhing! pew pew pew! wrnkwrnkwrankwrank! It's the American way!

:BAM: :end: :usa2: :usa!:

For reference, I consulted notable historical documents such as the Terminator Trilogy, Transformers (the original series), every STNG episode involving the Borg, the cheezy van Damme movie where he's a robot but it sucked so bad I can't remember the name - or maybe he wasn't a robot and he was just protecting one...okay, strike that because if he was protecting one she was a lame robot and that's why the movie was lame. Yeah, AI doesn't count either, because there are no robots with guns in that one so it was 3 hours of a whining robot.

/critique

I was gonna give him a sword :(

[Oreet]

I was gonna give him a sword :(

if the sword shoots laser beams, than we're getting somewhere :melvin:

[Shpadoinkleboy]

if the sword shoots laser beams, than we're getting somewhere :melvin:

Like The Legend of Zelda!